Thread:Reciter5613/@comment-24200891-20171219061615/@comment-24200891-20180122065257

I never planned to write "Lily's Birth", because it's already written on fanfiction.net in 4th and 5th chapter of https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12044078/1/My-Lily

This weekend I was editing Lincoln's birth to make it mre like script. By re-reading I realised I made Lori too unlikable. I need to tone her meanness down. I wrote her as mean to Lincoln since his birth, because then I didn't know her better side. Besides I needed a conflict in the story.

Someone on DArt criticized that Lucy's birth has too dark begining, because Lucy is prematurely born and Lincoln's lament is too soon after. I can put Lincoln's lament after Lucy is delivered to home, but would it be credible if the parents didn't tell their children what gender is the baby has before delivering the baby home?